Writing wildlife protection

摘 要：Get the students to pay more attention to environmental protection.這篇書面表達(dá)是以漫畫為材料的半開放式作文，只給出了中文的題目：“師傅被熏暈了”。通過觀察不難發(fā)現(xiàn)漫畫中師徒四人都表情痛苦，究其根源都是因?yàn)楹铀谔K的緣故。

關(guān)鍵詞：作文；漫畫；討論

中圖分類號(hào)：G632 文獻(xiàn)標(biāo)識(shí)碼：B 文章編號(hào)：1002-7661（2013）16-260-01

Teaching aims

Get the students to pay more attention to environmental protection.

Get the students to talk and write something about the environmental protection.

Teaching difficult points

To help students figure out the structures and main points of the passage.

To organize the passage properly.

這篇書面表達(dá)是以漫畫為材料的半開放式作文，只給出了中文的題目：“師傅被熏暈了”。通過觀察不難發(fā)現(xiàn)漫畫中師徒四人都表情痛苦，究其根源都是因?yàn)楹铀谔K的緣故。在平時(shí)的訓(xùn)練中，學(xué)生已經(jīng)對書面表達(dá)中出現(xiàn)的熱點(diǎn)問題有一定的熟悉和了解，所以很容易就能抓住本文的要點(diǎn)：環(huán)保問題。如果按照三段式作文來書寫，三段的具體內(nèi)容是什么。本節(jié)課采取小組合作模式，經(jīng)過兩輪有效討論得出最終需要的內(nèi)容。

Teaching procures

Step1Observe the picture and discuss the structure of the passage with the group members（確立文章的“點(diǎn)”）

一、What happened？

二、Reasons

三、Consequences

四、Measures

這四個(gè)關(guān)鍵信息的確立非常重要，首先第一段要交代發(fā)生什么事情了，要對整個(gè)事情有一個(gè)初步的描述。接下來按照就要討論為什么會(huì)出現(xiàn)這樣的現(xiàn)象以及這樣的情況會(huì)帶來什么結(jié)果及影響。最后針對此種現(xiàn)象作為參與者應(yīng)該怎么做，對全文起總結(jié)作用。

Step2 Discuss some specific and detailed information （確立文章的線）

第一輪討論確立了寫作框架，接下來就要確立寫作的詳細(xì)信息，及文章的“線”。文章的四個(gè)要點(diǎn)非常清晰，第一個(gè)描述漫畫信息，一句話就可以完成。所以文章的重點(diǎn)重心就在第二大段落上面。第二輪學(xué)生討論的重點(diǎn)是這種現(xiàn)象產(chǎn)生的具體原因是什么以及會(huì)產(chǎn)生什么樣的后果。學(xué)這輪討論大概需要10分鐘，討論結(jié)束之后，請同學(xué)上黑板來板書詳細(xì)的討論結(jié)果，以供同學(xué)們后面寫作時(shí)參考。下面試列舉一些學(xué)生討論的結(jié)果：

Reasons

一、Some factories built near the water pour dirty and waste water into the river

二、Some people throw rubbish into the river

三、The government turns a blind eye on the pollution

…

Consequences

四、Fish and some other creatures in the river would die because of the water pollution

五、People who live near the river would be sick

六、The plants grown by the river would be affected

七、It would cause air pollution

…

Step3 Organize the main points and uses the proper words to make the passage natural and fluent. （確定文章的“面”）

有了討論結(jié)果，學(xué)生就可以根據(jù)自己的觀點(diǎn)和供參考的信息合理組織自己的文章，值得強(qiáng)調(diào)的是，不能只是將這些要點(diǎn)連起來，學(xué)生要使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪^渡詞和過渡句將文章按照合理的裸機(jī)關(guān)系組織起來，這樣的文章才會(huì)結(jié)構(gòu)合理。

One possible version

One day Sun Waking together with his master and brothers was walking across a river. Suddenly his master fell off the horse by the bad smell of river water. They found the water so dirty that they could hardly breathe.

A lot of factories along the river always poured their waste water and rubbish straight into the river which made the river water polluted. In this way most of the fish in the river were killed. If the river water all over the country is polluted like this， no living things will exist in the water. Now more and more people have come to realize how serious this problem is. Our government is doing her best to take measures to fight against pollution. We expect that the water in every river will be made cleaner and cleaner before long.