英語(yǔ)優(yōu)秀作文賞評(píng)

瞿峰

[真題還原]

假設(shè)你叫李華，在你居住的小區(qū)有很多亂涂亂寫的現(xiàn)象，有人在此做廣告，有人在這里畫畫，甚至罵人。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下圖內(nèi)容，結(jié)合生活實(shí)際，給中國(guó)日?qǐng)?bào)China Daily寫一篇文章反映這種現(xiàn)象，說明自己對(duì)這一現(xiàn)象的看法，并提出解決辦法。

注意：1.根據(jù)以上內(nèi)容寫一篇短文，不要逐句翻譯，可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫；2.準(zhǔn)確使用語(yǔ)法和詞匯，使用一定的句型、詞匯，清楚、連貫地表達(dá)自己的意思；3.詞數(shù)：100個(gè)左右。開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Dear editor，

What the picture shows is just a common scene in the neighborhoods where we live， whether it is in city or in town. Public places are now made too much use of by people.

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Your sincerely， Li Hua

[學(xué)生佳作]

Dear editor，

What the picture shows is just a common scene in the neighborhoods where we live， whether it is in city or in town. Public places are now made too much use of by people. Some make drawings or practising their handwriting on walls in these places to show their talents or for fun. Some take advantage of such public places to make free advertisements. Others even put dirty words in these places to curse those whom they dont like.

In my point of view， measures should be taken by local administration organizations to keep public places tidy， clean and well preserved. On the other hand， people should mind their behaviors . As we know， the imageof a neighborhoodor a city is reflected especially in public places. The practices above spoil our living environmentand the impression on travelers to our hometown.

Yours sincerely， Li Hua

[教師點(diǎn)評(píng)]

本篇看圖作文針砭時(shí)弊，反映我們現(xiàn)實(shí)生活中的不良現(xiàn)象。話題新穎，描述了圖畫中的現(xiàn)象，并發(fā)表自己的看法，該生組織文字材料和寫作的能力都比較高。

[真題還原]

假設(shè)你校舉行題為“網(wǎng)吧的危害（Harmful Influence of Cyber Centers）”的征文活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下圖寫一篇英語(yǔ)短文，描述圖中的內(nèi)容，并就其反映的現(xiàn)象發(fā)表評(píng)論和提出方案。

要點(diǎn)提示：

1.一位父親在找兒子2.街上滿是網(wǎng)吧3.兒子在網(wǎng)吧玩4.描述網(wǎng)吧多的現(xiàn)狀5.網(wǎng)吧的危害（評(píng)論）6.解決方案

注意：

1.詞數(shù)：100左右；2.可適當(dāng)增添細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；3.文中不可使用真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；

4.參考詞匯：網(wǎng)吧：cyber center.

[學(xué)生佳作]

As we can see in the picture， a father is anxiously looking for his son addicted to online games. It seems that he has great trouble finding the boy because the street is full of cyber centers and he hardly knows in which one his son is enjoying games.

Nowadays， more and more cyber centers are being opened under cover of improving intelligence. In reality， these are places where large numbers of teenagers run into online chat or games and can rarely be pulled out. In my opinion， serious measures should be taken to reduce the number of cyber centers as well as to help teenagers develop some other hobbies which do them good.

[教師點(diǎn)評(píng)]

本篇寫作的話題是關(guān)于網(wǎng)吧對(duì)中學(xué)生的危害，描述了圖中的內(nèi)容，并發(fā)表評(píng)論和提出方案。這樣的話題與中學(xué)生的生活密切相關(guān)，是近年中考英語(yǔ)書面表達(dá)的熱點(diǎn)話題。

（作者單位：山東臨沂臨港經(jīng)濟(jì)開發(fā)區(qū)臨港一中）