某高中進行了一次學生睡眠時間調查,調查結果令人擔憂。請你根據調查獲得的數據(見統計表),給《中學生天地》(高中學習)的編輯寫一封信,分析中學生睡眠時間不足的原因,并提出解決問題的建議。
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Dear Editor,
I’m now writing to you to express my concerns about sleep time of senior high school students.
Recently a survey was conducted concerning students’ sleeping hours in our school, and the result greatly upsets us.
The survey indicates that sleeping hours of most students, 72%, range between seven and seven plus a half hours at night, while 13% sleep less than 7 hours. Another 10% nearly have enough sleep. And only 5% are the luckiest to have sufficient time to rest. But why’s that?
One cause is that many students are heavily burdened with homework. Another cause lies in the concept that more hours in studies may result in high scores in tests. Occasionally, some students may stay up late participating in time-consuming activities — watching soap operas or playing computer games.
As an old saying goes, a sufficient rest leads to high efficiency. And enough sleep makes healthy and wise men of us. So in my opinion, if parents impose less pressure on their children, teachers assign us less homework and we students learn more efficiently, enough sleep for students will surely be guaranteed and students may live a happier and sunnier life.
【Comments】
This passage is characterized by a clear and compact structure, logical analysis, and appropriate proposal of solutions.
It reads fluently and is significant in coherence due to the writer’s skillful use of cohesive expressions such as But why’s that, occasionally, as an old saying goes, in my opinion, etc.
It also features a flexible application of different grammatical structures. For instance, the adoption of a conditional clause “if parents impose less pressure on their children”, and an appositive clause“that more hours in studies may result in high scores in tests”.
(奉化中學孫夏怡指導老師周道義)