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楊　驍

My name is Yang Xiao. Im twelve years old. I study in Class 11,Grade 1, Wujin Middle School.

I very like English(1) and Im in charge of English study(英語科代表) in our class. Its an interesting work(2). Some of my classmates often ask me help(3) them with their English and I always ready(4) to do so. I am never(5) get angry. Im happy all the day. Often I help my English teacher do many things because hes very busy. My teacher always say(6) I do a good job and my classmates also say Im friendly and helpful. Im glad to hear these good words and I really like this job.

I also like reading all kinds of English books and newspapers. In my eyes, English is fun and useful. I want to be an English teacher when I grow up.

Teachers comments(教師點評)

本文是小作者的一張自畫像，它從幾個方面突出了作者“我”的特點，如：性格溫柔、樂于助人、愛好看書。文章簡潔，層次較為清楚，富有兒童情趣。下列句子應作適當修改。

(1)將very like English 改為like English very much。very like是中式表達，“非常喜歡”的英語表達應為like…very much。

(2)去掉不定冠詞an， work是不可數名詞，不能用an修飾，或將work改為job。

(3)在help前加to。ask sb. to do sth.意為“請某人做某事”。

(4)在always前加am。ready是形容詞，意為“準備好的”，不能單獨作謂語。be ready to do sth.意為“樂于做某事”。

(5)將never前的am去掉。“助動詞dont+實義動詞原形”或在實義動詞前加never(從來不)構成否定式。

(6)將say改為says。My teacher是第三人稱單數，作主語，謂語動詞也應用第三人稱單數形式says。

Improved writing(修改后文章)

Self Introduction

My name is Yang Xiao. Im twelve years old. I study in Class 11,Grade 1, Wujin Middle School.

I like English very much and Im in charge of English study(英語科代表) in our class. Its interesting work. Some of my classmates often ask me to help them with their English and I am always ready to do so. I never get angry. Im happy all the day. Often I help my English teacher do many things because hes very busy. My teacher always says I do a good job and my classmates also say Im friendly and helpful. Im glad to hear these good words and I really like this job.

I also like reading all kinds of English books and newspapers. In my eyes, English is fun and useful. I want to be an English teacher when I grow up.

指導教師： 馬曉燕