2023年12月大學英語四、六級作文試題評析（二）

四級

Directions： Suppose the university newspaper is inviting submissions from the students for its coming edition on what in their university impresses them most. You are now to write an essay for submission. You will have 30 minutes to write the essay. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

這道大學英語四級作文試題假設校報邀請學生們投稿，內容是大學里什么給他們留下最深印象。大學給學生留下最深印象的有很多方面，既可以是具體的，比如美麗的校園、富有朝氣的學生和豐富多彩的社團活動等；也可以是抽象的，比如悠久的歷史、優良的校風和積極進取的精神風貌等。由于題目中的impresses用的是單數形式，考生宜僅從一個方面來寫。

本文可以寫三個段落。

第一段指出自己是上海理工大學的一名大一新生，大學給自己留下最深印象的是它位于黃浦江畔的美麗校園。

第二段介紹給自己留下深刻印象的校園美景。我們不妨從以下幾個方面依次展開。首先，由于這所大學可以追溯到創建于1906年的滬江大學，校園里有六七座哥特風格的歷史建筑，它們講述著這所著名學府的傳奇往事；校園里還點綴著幾座雅致的別墅，周圍櫻花樹環繞，每到春天櫻花盛開。其次，校園里的建筑紅磚黛瓦，道路兩邊排列著參天大樹，構成美麗的風景。除此之外，由于其獨特的位置，這所大學還有其他大學所沒有的景色：黃浦江上往來的船只。

第三段先總結全文，先指出這座以哥特式建筑、林蔭道和櫻花而著稱的校園在都市的喧囂中為學生提供了一片綠洲，然后感嘆自己很幸運能在這樣美麗的校園里度過大學時光。

下面請看參考范文：

As a freshman of the University of Shanghai for Science and Technology， I am most impressed by its beautiful campus， which is located on the Huangpu River.

The university dates back to Shanghai College founded in 1906， so its campus is home to half a dozen historic buildings of Gothic style， which tell of the storied past of this famed university. The campus is also dotted with several elegant villas， surrounded by cherry trees that blossom brilliantly in spring. The buildings here are built of red bricks and black tiles and the pathways are lined with towering trees， making a beautiful sight. On top of that， the university， due to its unique situation， commands a view other schools don’t have： ships of all sizes and shapes sailing on the Huangpu River.

Known for its Gothic architecture， tree-lined paths and cherry blossoms， the campus of my university offers us students an oasis amongst the hustle and bustle of downtown Shanghai. I am dead lucky to spend my college days on such a beautiful campus. （172 words）

語言亮點借鑒：

1. The university dates back to Shanghai College founded in 1906， so its campus is home to half a dozen historic buildings of Gothic style， which tell of the storied past of this famed university. 這所大學的歷史可以追溯到創建于1906年的滬江大學，所以校園里有六七座哥特風格的歷史建筑，它們講述著這所著名學府的傳奇往事。be home to （某處）有。storied 廣為流傳的。

2. On top of that， the university， due to its unique situation， commands a view other universities don’t have： ships of all sizes and shapes sailing on the Huangpu River. 除此之外，由于其獨特的位置，這所大學還有其他學校所沒有的景色：黃浦江上航行的各種大小和形狀的船只。situation 位置。command 擁有。

3. Known for its Gothic architecture， tree-lined paths and cherry blossoms， the campus of my university offers us students an oasis amongst the hustle and bustle of downtown Shanghai. 我的大學校園以哥特式建筑、林蔭道和櫻花而著稱，它在上海的都市喧囂中為我們學生提供了一片綠洲。hustle and bustle 喧囂。

4. I am dead lucky to spend my college days on such a beautiful campus. 我真是太幸運了，能在這樣美麗的校園里度過大學時光。dead 非常。例如：You were dead lucky to get that job. 你得到那份工作，真是太幸運了。

六級

Directions： For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay that begins with the sentence “As is known to all， gaining a sound knowledge of the basics is of vital importance for students to master an academic subject.” You can make comments， cite examples or use your personal experiences to develop your essay. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words （not including the sentence given）.

這道大學英語六級作文試題屬于闡釋觀點型。此類型題目的特點是提出一個觀點，要求考生論證這個觀點的正確性。這道題要求考生論證的觀點是，獲得扎實的基礎知識對掌握一門學科至關重要。我們在審題時要善于透過復雜的表述抓住題目的關鍵。這道題目的關鍵是論述掌握扎實的基礎知識的重要性。

本文可以寫三個段落。

第一段先提出論點：獲得扎實的基礎知識對掌握一門學科至關重要，然后引用專家的意見支撐這個觀點。此為破題。

第二段論證為什么獲得扎實的基礎知識對掌握一門學科至關重要，即論證掌握扎實的基礎知識的重要性。我們在論證一個道理時，不妨“虛則實之”，即舉出具體的例子來證明抽象的觀點。我們可以先以數學為例：你需要先理解了代數、幾何和三角的基礎知識，才能繼續學習高深的內容。接著我們再以學習演奏樂器為例進行類比論證：要精湛地演奏一種樂器，你必須先牢固地掌握基本技能。為了增強說服力，我們再從反面進行論證：如果忽視了掌握基礎知識的重要性，你可能就難以理解高深的知識和技能。

本文可以用建議法結尾。第三段先總結上文，指出復雜的理論和概念是建立在基礎知識之上的，然后建議大學生投入時間和精力打牢基礎，以便于掌握一門學科。

下面請看參考范文：

As is known to all， gaining a sound knowledge of the basics is of vital importance for students to master an academic subject. In actual fact， many experts believe that the key to success in any field is a deep understanding of the basics.

Basic knowledge is the foundation on which more complex ideas are built. So having a good command of the basics is a prerequisite for mastering an academic subject. Let’s take mathematics as an example. It is necessary for you to first understand the basics of algebra， geometry， and trigonometry before moving on to more advanced topics. In the same way， to be an accomplished player of a musical instrument， you have to gain a complete mastery of basic skills. Conversely， if you overlook the importance of mastering the fundamentals， you may struggle to understand advanced materials or skills.

Basics are the building blocks upon which more complex theories and concepts are constructed. Therefore it is advised that college students invest time and effort in laying a solid foundation so as to master an academic subject. （179 words）

語言亮點借鑒：

1. In actual fact， many experts believe that the key to success in any field is a deep understanding of the basics. 確切地說，許多專家認為在任何領域獲得成功的關鍵就是深入理解基礎知識。in actual fact確切地說。這個短語可用來補充說明或強調前面所說的話。

2. Let’s take mathematics as an example. 讓我們以數學為例吧。這是舉例論證的一個常用句型。

3. Conversely， if you overlook the importance of mastering the fundamentals， you may struggle to understand advanced materials or skills. 反過來，如果你忽視了掌握基礎知識的重要性，你可能難以理解高深的知識和技能。conversely 相反地，反過來。這是一個作正反論證的常用過渡語。fundamentals 基本知識。struggle to do sth 難以做某事。

4. Therefore it is advised that college students invest time and effort in laying a solid foundation so as to master an academic subject. 因此建議大學生投入時間和精力夯實基礎，以便于掌握一門學科。it is advised that… 是一個提建議的常用句型。lay a solid foundation 夯實基礎。

* 上海外國語大學國際新聞碩士，講師，專注大學英語寫作教學十余年。