河北省獻(xiàn)縣第二中學(xué)九()班 李可可
There are many kinds of sports that I enjoy,such as swimming,running and walking.However,the sport that I like most is playing basketball.
When I was eleven years old,I started to play basketball at school.I was tall enough to joining the school basketball team.The basketball team leader invited me several times to join them.But my parents disagreed with me on the point.They thought it would cost me too much time.Going to a university was what they expected me to.They allowed me to play basketball as a hobby.
Now,I would like to watch basketball games as much as I can.The basketball games have given me the most wonderful time in my life.
教師點(diǎn)評(píng)
這是一篇介紹自己喜歡的體育運(yùn)動(dòng)的英語(yǔ)習(xí)作。全文中心突出,層次清晰,語(yǔ)句流暢。
作者在文章開(kāi)頭列舉了幾種自己喜歡的體育運(yùn)動(dòng),但最喜歡的運(yùn)動(dòng)是籃球。接下來(lái)又?jǐn)⑹隽俗约鹤孕【拖矚g籃球,后來(lái)為加入學(xué)校籃球隊(duì)和父母產(chǎn)生了分歧?,F(xiàn)在會(huì)盡可能多地看籃球比賽。文中巧妙地運(yùn)用了一些賓語(yǔ)從句、定語(yǔ)從句等。另外,such as、however、cost、allow、as...as one can等詞語(yǔ)也運(yùn)用得非常好。
美中不足的是,畫(huà)線部分出現(xiàn)了一點(diǎn)錯(cuò)誤,應(yīng)改為join;結(jié)尾處有點(diǎn)突兀,若加上“How about you?”等句子會(huì)顯得更完美一些。