We should protect animals

安徽省肥東縣凱悅中學八（1）班 丁夢瑤

【習作內容】

Hello,everyone.Let's talk about wild animals today.

As we know,human beings could not live without animals around us.But more and more wild animalsare in danger,such as tigers,pandas and elephants.

Why are so many animals in danger?Because of human!The villages and fields are growing bigger.But grounds and forests are growing smaller.And there isn't enough①clear water for wild animals to drink andhumanalso②filledlotsofwild animals.We took away their homes.

What should we do to protect animals?It's very easy.We can let our families protectwild animals.And the governmentshouldsetupmorenature③park and warn people to reduce the pollution of rivers.

The wild animals are our friends.I think,protecting animals is protecting ourselves.

【教師點評】

本文是一篇關于保護動物題材的習作文章。小作者從珍稀動物的現狀、動物瀕危的原因以及保護動物的建議三個方面進行了說明。

行文中，小作者能夠靈活運用所學的句型、短語和語法，使文章達到語言精練的效果。同時全文主題突出，條理清晰，語言流暢。文章的結尾升華了主題，以引起讀者的共鳴，具有畫龍點睛的作用！

需完善的內容：

①clear改為 clean。clean作形容詞時，意為“干凈的”，clear意為“清澈的；透明的”。 在這里用clean能更恰當地形容“干凈的水源”。

②filled改為killed。fill意為“裝滿；充滿”，kill意為“殺死”，這里要表達的是“人們也會殺害一些野生動物”。這兩個屬于拼寫中易混淆的單詞。

③park改為 parks。park為可數名詞，且前面有單詞more（更多的）修飾，因此park應用復數形式。