短文習(xí)作：Dream

汪璇

根據(jù)下列提示，并結(jié)合事例，用英語寫一篇短文。

The poor man is not the man without a cent， but the man without a dream. Only when he ?takes action can he achieve his dream.

注意：①無須寫標(biāo)題;

②除詩歌外，文體不限;

③內(nèi)容必須結(jié)合你生活中的一個事例;

④文中不得透露個人姓名和學(xué)校名稱;

⑤詞數(shù)不少于120，如引用提示語則不計入總詞數(shù)。

[思路點(diǎn)撥]

1. 審題謀篇

本篇作文審題的關(guān)鍵在于后一句話，有夢想還要通過采取行動才能實行，不能空有夢想。因此在寫作時，同學(xué)們應(yīng)該先表明自己的夢想，然后敘述自己通過哪些實際行動實現(xiàn)或者接近了夢想。此類作文通常采取三段式結(jié)構(gòu)：引言—主體—結(jié)尾，即第一段引出話題，第二段緊扣話題敘述事例，第三段小結(jié)主題。

2. 寫作技巧

①緊扣話題。考試中同學(xué)們務(wù)必讀懂英文意思，緊扣話題中心，切勿跑題、偏題，這是寫好作文的第一步。

②草擬提綱，構(gòu)思篇章。在正式答卷之前，可以簡單地在草稿紙上列出提綱，把中心詞、關(guān)鍵短語、精彩句型羅列出來，這樣可以盡可能地保持卷面整潔干凈。

③運(yùn)用短語，行文流暢。書面表達(dá)重在達(dá)意，恰當(dāng)?shù)厥褂眯┻B詞短語使得文章銜接自然。要避免中式英文表達(dá)。

④豐富詞匯，句型多變。盡量用不同的詞匯表達(dá)同一含義，同時盡可能多地使用較為復(fù)雜的句型。倒裝、強(qiáng)調(diào)句、三大從句等的正確使用無疑會給作文增色不少。

Dreaming makes those who struggle for it. As far as I am concerned， the one who own and be eager for their dream is doomed to succeed， no matter how severe the journey will be.

As for me， I have such a dream that one day in the future， I， as a successful gentleman stand on the top of the Dubai tower， looking down on the lives which are as small as the cell. As someone put it， success lies in hard work while laziness leads to failure. In addition， the god will always bless those who try out for dreams， so what I ought to do is to achieve it and stick to it. Every time I made much progress in the exams I was so proud of myself. It is one step for me from dream to reality you know.

Dreams dreamed by many people， but only belong to the prepared. There must be quantities of difficulties in the future， but life isnt about how to live through the storm， but how to dance in the rain. Therefore we need to take action to improve ourselves and it was in this way that our dream can come true.

點(diǎn)評 ?這篇短文涵蓋了題目給出的所有信息，句子與段落之間使用了恰當(dāng)?shù)倪^渡詞，整篇文章銜接緊密，文字流暢自然。雖然結(jié)合自身事例部分描述得不夠細(xì)致，但是全文運(yùn)用了多處高級句式和表達(dá)，仍不失為一篇優(yōu)秀的學(xué)生習(xí)作。……