Smoking

于瑩 ? 1992年畢業(yè)于山東師范大學(xué)，中學(xué)高級(jí)教師、梁山縣優(yōu)秀教師，曾獲市級(jí)優(yōu)質(zhì)課一等獎(jiǎng)，一直擔(dān)任初中英語的教學(xué)工作，所帶班級(jí)連續(xù)多年在中考中取得優(yōu)異成績。2012年12月在山東省英語競賽中榮獲優(yōu)秀指導(dǎo)教師稱號(hào)。先后在《中學(xué)生英語》、《山東教育導(dǎo)報(bào)》、《現(xiàn)代中學(xué)生》、《初中生英語學(xué)習(xí)》、《英語輔導(dǎo)報(bào)》、《英語周報(bào)》、《學(xué)生導(dǎo)報(bào)》、《新課堂》等國家級(jí)、省級(jí)報(bào)刊上發(fā)表教學(xué)論文三十多篇。

Smoking

It is almost known to all that smoking is bad for peoples health. Smoking can lead to heart disease， cancers and so on. There are 2.5 millions① people dying from smoking every year.

Still， many people find it difficult to stop smoking. One reason is that smoking usually become② a habit， which is not easy to be given up. Another reason is the effect of nicotine， which is contained in tobacco.

Measures has③ been taken to help people reduce the harm of smoking. In many cities， smoking is forbidden in public places. The danger of smoking is warned everywhere. And newspapers are asked dont④ to publish advertisements for cigarettes. World “No Tobacco Day” has been set against smoking.

山東梁山楊營中學(xué)九年級(jí)（六）班 ? 高成浩

1. 優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

文章內(nèi)容全面，敘述有層次，連貫自如，準(zhǔn)確地運(yùn)用了時(shí)態(tài)，并嘗試著用較為復(fù)雜的句式，是篇不錯(cuò)的習(xí)作。

2. 需要修改的地方：

① millions去掉s。當(dāng)hundred， thousand， million等詞與具體數(shù)字連用時(shí)，不用復(fù)數(shù)形式。

② become加上s。動(dòng)名詞做主語，動(dòng)詞用單數(shù)。

③ has改為have，前面是復(fù)數(shù)名詞，故用have。

④ dont改為not。此處為ask sb. not to do sth.的被動(dòng)形式。

3. 評(píng)分：

按中考英語作文滿分15分的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得12分。