“低頭族”現象

廖英

近幾年，高考書面表達命題形式逐漸由限制型向開放型過渡，給同學們提供了更大的發揮空間。作為開放性作文的一種形式，漫畫作文往往要求同學們將有豐富寓意的圖畫轉變成文字形式。以下讓我們從科學技術這個話題切入來談談如何構思行文此類文章，請看下列話題：

請根據下面提示，寫一篇短文，詞數不少于120.

You are discussing the following picture with your friend Jim. Now you are telling him how you understand the picture and what makes you think so.

點撥 漫畫家往往從政治事件或生活現象中取材，通過夸張、比喻、象征、寓意等手法，表現為幽默、詼諧的畫面，借以諷刺、批評或歌頌某些人和事。攻克此類文章的關鍵在于仔細分析、觀察細節。通過仔細讀圖，我們可以把這幅漫畫概括出以下三個內容要點：祖父的生日聚會；子孫晚輩都在場卻個個為“低頭族”；祖父很失望無助。這幅漫畫的寓意是：當今社會人們迷戀電子產品，彼此間越來越冷漠。

把握了寓意后，接下來就應思考如何謀篇布局了。我們大體上可以將文章分為三段。第一段主要是讀圖，即描述漫畫中的信息。第一句話應該開門見山地說明漫畫中討論的是什么事情，然后進一步描述細節，點明漫畫的象征意義。第二段是全文的重點，可以具體分析圖畫中折射的社會現象： 1. 數碼產品讓人癡迷。2. 過度沉迷依賴科技產品的后果。同學們在提出一個總論點之后，可借助“firstly， secondly， thirdly”等形式提出分支論點，從而讓觀點更清晰具體。第三段是總結段落，應闡明自己的觀點，如平衡科技和生活的關系。

習作一

As the picture shown， it is the day that every children should celebrate their grandfathers birthday， also should accompany with their grandfather， while his guys are all lost in playing their ceilphone！ What a ridiculous scene！ This phenomenon should be attached much importance by citizens.

Being too accustomed to their ceilphone， their mental and physical health will be seriously effected. The authentic world of internet couldnt give us the real and accessible comfort and motivation. We are under the control of those machine that has no emotion， no real sense. There is no escaping the fact that playing ceilphone will straightly hurt our eyes and sprain.

Instead of playing the ceilphone while we are available， we should do some energetic and beneficial activity， such as taking exercise， having a reading in a quiet afternoon when you are alone， all of these could also help us remove our attention to the electronic machine and do something meaningful.

點評 這是一篇中檔習作?！?br>