My City

佳作發(fā)現(xiàn)地：江蘇省徐州市桃園路小學(xué)

I live in Xuzhou. There are many interesting places， such as Yunlong Lake（云龍湖）， Yunlong Mountain（云龍山）， and Guishan Han Tomb（龜山漢墓）. My favourite one is Yunlong Lake. It is like a big silver mirror. I can go boating on it. The people are also very kind and warm-hearted. Welcome to Xuzhou！

六（1）班 謝佳辰

Xuzhou is a beautiful city. You can visit Xuzhou Museum， Baolian Temple（寶蓮寺）， Pengzu Garden（彭祖園）， and so on. I like Pengzu Garden best， because there are many beautiful flowers， slides， and pirate boats（海盜船）. My city is full of joy.

六（2）班 劉倬熙

指導(dǎo)老師點(diǎn)評(píng)：

兩篇作文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰、層次清楚。小作者們開(kāi)頭點(diǎn)明自己生活的城市，接著介紹城市的美景，最后描述自己最喜歡的地方，由面到點(diǎn)，讓這座城市顯得十分親切、可愛(ài)。 （管曉春）

佳作發(fā)現(xiàn)地：江蘇省徐州經(jīng)濟(jì)技術(shù)開(kāi)發(fā)區(qū)實(shí)驗(yàn)學(xué)校

I live in Xuzhou， a wonderful place. In Xuzhou， there are many fun places， such as Fantawild Wonderland（方特樂(lè)園）， Yunlong Lake， and Yunlong Mountain. Yunlong Lake is a national 5A-level tourist attraction（國(guó)家5A級(jí)旅游景區(qū)）. However， I love Yunlong Mountain best. I enjoy climbing with my family at weekends. It’s very interesting. I love my city very much.

五（17）班 范依辰

Xuzhou is my hometown， an old city with a long history and the culture of the two Han dynasties. If you like history， you can go to the Ximatai Ruins（戲馬臺(tái)） and Xuzhou Museum to learn about its rich history and cultural relics（文物）. There are a lot of delicious food in Xuzhou. You will love the barbecue. Welcome to Xuzhou today！

五（17）班 季暄晟

指導(dǎo)老師點(diǎn)評(píng)：

兩位同學(xué)從不同的角度介紹了自己的城市——徐州。范依辰同學(xué)側(cè)重于游覽，重點(diǎn)介紹了云龍湖和云龍山。季暄晟同學(xué)主要聚焦歷史，介紹了戲馬臺(tái)和徐州博物館。在寫(xiě)城市時(shí)，我們可以抓住城市的主要特色進(jìn)行介紹，讓文章更生動(dòng)、具體。 （房艷平）