This is me!

鄭云

近日，你班正在評選體育主播，你打算參評。請結合特長介紹自己，表達出對體育的熱愛。

Hello， everyone！ My name is Tom. I am a student in Class 9， Grade 7.

I am tall and thin. I have black hair and a round face. My eyes are not big. I often have a smile on my face. I am a friendly boy.

I like reading and many kinds of sports. Basketball is my favourite. I began to play it when I was five years old. I usually run on the playground after school. Now， I am a member of the school basketball team. Last month， our team won two matches and I felt happy.

Among all the basketball players， I like Yao Ming best. He is so cool. In the future， I will practise hard and I want to be a basketball player like him！

可適當增加連接詞和過渡句，使文章顯得緊湊、有層次，表達更加流暢自然。

本段落需要緊扣段落中心，具體描述作者的愛好和特長，此處遺漏寫作要點——特長。

此句與“愛好和特長”無關。

此處“cool”不能準確表達姚明是偶像的原因。

建議用富有情感的語言表達對實現夢想的渴望。

Hello， everyone！ My name is Tom. I am a student in Class 9， Grade 7.

I am tall and thin. I have black hair and a round face. My eyes are not big， but they are bright. I often have a smile on my face and everyone thinks I am very friendly.

I love reading because I think it makes me know many things about the world. I also like many kinds of sports like football， badminton and basketball. Basketball is my favourite and I really do well in it. I began to play it when I was five years old. I often run on the playground after school. Now， I am a member of the school basketball team.

Among all the basketball players， I like Yao Ming best. He plays basketball very well and often helps his team come first in the match， so he is my hero. In the future， I will practise harder and I want to be a basketball player like him. I hope my dream will come true someday！

（江蘇省靖江市實驗學校 陳垚竹）

本篇書面表達的主題是自我介紹，全文緊扣評選體育主播這個話題，結構合理，條理清晰，邏輯性強，體現了小作者積極向上的生活態度。

文章語言生動、流暢、精練，句式富有變化，時態把握準確。小作者能靈活運用七年級英語教材Unit 1和Unit 2所學的新短語和句式來表達外貌、愛好、特長、偶像和夢想等，也能較好地運用but， and， so， because， when等連詞，使文章緊湊，富有層次感。