廣東 袁丹純
For many years,I had a recurring(重復(fù)出現(xiàn)的)dream in which I was still a little girl,with books carried in my arm,ready to go to school.Deep inside,I knew where the dream came from.It was about some unfinished business in my life.As a kid,I loved everything about school.Most of all,I longed to receive my diploma(畢業(yè)證書(shū)).
But at 15,I had to drop out because my parents couldn't afford tuition.My hope of getting a diploma was gone.Pretty soon,I married and had three children whom I wanted to be educated.But Linda,our youngest child,had juvenile arthritis(幼年型關(guān)節(jié)炎)in her hands,which made it impossible for her in a normal classroom.But I did not want her to live with regrets as I did.It was then that I saw an ad in the newspaper for evening courses.So I signed her up for the night school.
Surprisingly,when Linda was filling out enrollment(入學(xué))forms,the secretary said to me,“Mrs Schantz,why don't you come back to school?”I laughed,“There's no way!I'm 55!”But he persisted,and before I knew what I had done,I was enrolled for classes in Eng?lish.I told myself to try for just a semester and to see if it would work.Anyway,my dream was still there in my heart.
It was exciting to go to school again,but it was not a game.Sitting in a classroom full of kids was awkward,even if most of them were respectful and encouraging.During the day,I was still a busy married woman with loads of housework to do.In the evening,I was a hard?working student working on my courses.To my surprise,both Linda and I did very well in night school.I went back again the next semester,with my grades steadily improving.
I have to say the evening courses were not easy for both of us.But neither of us gave up.At last,I got my diploma.What's more,I got a$3,000 college scholarship thanks to my excellent academic performance.The unfinished business in my dreams was eventually finished.
drop out輟學(xué)
with regrets帶著遺憾
be enrolled for被錄取
一、with sth doing/done/to do
1.For many years,I had a recurring dream in which I was still a little girl,with books carried in my arm,ready to go to school.很多年來(lái),我重復(fù)做著同樣一個(gè)夢(mèng),在夢(mèng)里我還是一個(gè)小女孩,懷里抱著書(shū)準(zhǔn)備上學(xué)。
【點(diǎn)石成金】with books carried in my arm表示“懷里抱著書(shū)”,是“with+賓語(yǔ)+過(guò)去分詞”結(jié)構(gòu),意為“某事/某人被……的狀態(tài)”。
【運(yùn)用遷移】?jī)词直粠нM(jìn)來(lái),手被綁在背后。
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2.I was still a busy married woman with loads of housework to do.我仍然是一個(gè)需要做大量家務(wù)的忙碌的已婚婦女。
【點(diǎn)石成金】with loads of housework to do表示“有大量的家務(wù)需要做”,是“with+賓語(yǔ)+to do”結(jié)構(gòu),意為“有……要做”。
【運(yùn)用遷移】有很多問(wèn)題需要解決,剛剛選上的總統(tǒng)正面臨難關(guān)。
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3.I went back again the next semester,with my grades steadily improving.我第二學(xué)期又回去上課,成績(jī)?cè)诓粩嗟剡M(jìn)步。
【點(diǎn)石成金】with my grades steadily improving表示“我的成績(jī)?cè)诓粩嗟剡M(jìn)步”,是“with+賓語(yǔ)+doing”結(jié)構(gòu),意為“有某事/某人做……”。
【運(yùn)用遷移】沒(méi)有人注意的時(shí)候,我偷偷地走進(jìn)了房間。
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二、非限制性定語(yǔ)從句
But Linda,our youngest child,had juvenile arthritis in her hands,which made it im?possible for her in a normal classroom.但是我們最小的孩子琳達(dá)手部患有幼年型關(guān)節(jié)炎,這使得她上不了普通的學(xué)校。
【點(diǎn)石成金】which made it impossible for her in a normal classroom是非限制性定語(yǔ)從句,其中,make it impossible中的it是形式賓語(yǔ),指代后面真正的賓語(yǔ)in a normal classroom。
【運(yùn)用遷移】它在一年內(nèi)就被建成了,這簡(jiǎn)直令人難以置信。
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一家英語(yǔ)報(bào)社正在面向中學(xué)生征文,主題是“My dream”。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn)和你的暢想完成短文。
1.你的夢(mèng)想是什么;
2.你的打算。
注意:
1.詞數(shù)80左右;
2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié),以使行文連貫;
3.至少使用一個(gè)“with+賓語(yǔ)+非謂語(yǔ)”結(jié)構(gòu)或形式賓語(yǔ);
4.注意段落內(nèi)的邏輯關(guān)系。
My dream
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寫(xiě)作導(dǎo)引
本次寫(xiě)作任務(wù)是寫(xiě)一篇表達(dá)計(jì)劃與愿望的記敘文,要求學(xué)生寫(xiě)出自己的夢(mèng)想以及描述如何實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想,并且至少使用一個(gè)“with+賓語(yǔ)+非謂語(yǔ)”結(jié)構(gòu)或形式賓語(yǔ),這些寫(xiě)作要求和所給語(yǔ)篇的主題語(yǔ)境是緊密相關(guān)的。我們可以通過(guò)整合同主題閱讀材料的內(nèi)容和語(yǔ)言,梳理寫(xiě)作思路和積累素材。
一、語(yǔ)篇解碼
(一)內(nèi)容分析
What is the text mainly about?
(二)宏觀結(jié)構(gòu)
Fill in the blanks according to the text.

Content I yearned for(渴望)everything about 1 .Most of all,I longed to receive my 2 .I had to drop out because my parents couldn't 3 4 .Structure What Why How I took Linda to sign up for 5 courses and I was persuaded to attend classes in 6 .The ending I came back again in the 7 semester and my grades improved.Finally I got a college 8 and finished my unfinished business.
二、素材積累
本次寫(xiě)作任務(wù)是基于同一主題的文章閱讀下的寫(xiě)作,我們可以通過(guò)模仿并運(yùn)用文章中的語(yǔ)言表達(dá),如詞塊和句型,積累寫(xiě)作的語(yǔ)言素材。
(一)計(jì)劃與愿望的核心短語(yǔ)
1.feel like doing sth想要做某事
2.be eager/anxious/dying for渴望……
3.make arrangements for為……做準(zhǔn)備
4.have a desire to do渴望做……
5.with the hope/aim of帶著……的希望/目的
6.draw near/around the corner/be approaching即將到來(lái)
7.take on a new look呈現(xiàn)新面貌
(二)計(jì)劃與愿望的核心句型
1.Realizing the benefits and importance of this activity,I have a strong desire to par?ticipate in it.
意識(shí)到本次活動(dòng)的益處和重要性,我強(qiáng)烈希望參與其中。
2.As a child,I always hoped that I could grow up as soon as possible so that I could contribute to the construction of our country.
小時(shí)候,我總是希望自己快點(diǎn)長(zhǎng)大,以便我能為祖國(guó)的建設(shè)做貢獻(xiàn)。
3.I'm determined to be a doctor.Not only can doctors save people's lives,but also they can help people live a better life with their professional knowledge.
我決心成為一名醫(yī)生。醫(yī)生不僅能挽救人們的生命,而且他們可以用他們的專(zhuān)業(yè)知識(shí)來(lái)幫助人們過(guò)更好的生活。
4.I will make a 15?day tour of Britain after my graduation from senior high school this summer,which will be a good chance for me to experience British culture and practice my oral English.
今年夏天高中畢業(yè)后,我將去英國(guó)進(jìn)行為期15天的觀光旅游,對(duì)我來(lái)說(shuō),這將是一次體驗(yàn)英國(guó)文化、練習(xí)英語(yǔ)口語(yǔ)的好機(jī)會(huì)。
三、寫(xiě)作支架
本次寫(xiě)作任務(wù)是寫(xiě)一篇關(guān)于計(jì)劃與愿望的記敘文。根據(jù)任務(wù)中的要求,語(yǔ)篇結(jié)構(gòu)可定為“提出愿望+如何實(shí)施”。文章的框架如下:
I have longed to...since I was...years old because I feel like...Not only can...but al?so...In my eyes,it will be a good chance for me to...
In order to realize my dream,here is what I will do.First,it would be a great way to do...In addition,I had better...Last but not least,it would not be a bad idea if I keep do?ing...
四、語(yǔ)篇過(guò)手
根據(jù)以上提供的主題、主題表達(dá)和語(yǔ)篇結(jié)構(gòu),寫(xiě)出表達(dá)計(jì)劃與愿望的記敘文。第一段提出自己的夢(mèng)想,第二段描述如何實(shí)現(xiàn)自己的夢(mèng)想。總詞數(shù)控制在80左右。
同時(shí),學(xué)習(xí)運(yùn)用前文閱讀中出現(xiàn)的“with+賓語(yǔ)+非謂語(yǔ)”結(jié)構(gòu)或形式賓語(yǔ)。注意表達(dá)的內(nèi)在邏輯關(guān)系,需要注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞。