
本期點評名師
陳傳光男,江蘇省連云港市羅陽中學(xué)高級教師、連云港市優(yōu)秀教育園丁、江蘇省教育學(xué)會會員,從事教育工作15年:曾獲英語專業(yè)技能大賽市一等獎、班主任基本功大賽市一等獎:有多篇論文在各主流和核心期刊上發(fā)表:曾指導(dǎo)學(xué)生在各類競賽中取得不錯的成績,有多人獲得省級獎和地市級獎。
My Summer Vacation Plan
Summer vacation is coming. I have made some plans for it.
During the vacation, I will make sure that the diet is regular and suitable. And I willkeep exercising for about half an hour every day. I think it will be good for my healthy①,Besides, I want to preview what we are going to learn. It can make me feel relaxed when Ilearn new knowledge. After finsh② studying, I will also go intcrcsting somewhere③. I thinkvisiting some places of interest can increase our knowledge.
What do you think of my summer vacation plan?
江蘇省連云港市羅陽中學(xué)九年級
丁浩宸
1.優(yōu)點:
該篇習(xí)作中小作者介紹了自己的暑假計劃,從健康飲食與運動,預(yù)習(xí)新課和參觀名勝三個方面具體介紹了暑假安排。全文層次清晰,用詞準確,語句通順,關(guān)聯(lián)詞及復(fù)合句、祈使句的使用體現(xiàn)了作者扎實的語言功底。
2.需要修改的地方:
①healthy改為health。my是形容性物主代詞,后接名詞 health。
②finish改為finishing。After是介詞,后接動詞“ing”形式。
③interesting someWhere改為somewhere interesting。形容詞修飾不定副詞,放在不定副詞后。詞后。
3.評分:
按江蘇省連云港市中考英語作文滿分25分的評分標準,本文修改前可得22分。