地點類說明文的特點

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地點介紹類說明文的語言特點：1.時態，多用一般現在時。2.方位詞的準確運用，過渡語的恰當使用。3.譴詞造句的簡潔，不要有過分渲染或模棱兩可的說法。

假定你是李華，你的美國朋友Sarah打算暑期來北京旅游，來信詢問改建后前門大街的情況。請你寫封回信，簡單介紹一下內容：

1.簡況：長800余米、600多年歷史、300余家商鋪；

2.位置：天安門廣場南面；

3.交通：公共汽車17、69、59等路，地鐵2號線；

4.特色：步行街、當當車、茶館、劇院等。

參考詞匯：

步行街——pedestrian street

當當車——trolley car

地鐵——subway

注意：

1.詞數100左右，開頭語已為你寫好；

2.可以適當增加細節，以使行文連貫。

Dear Sarah，

Thank you for your letter asking about the rebuilt Qianmen Street. Here is something about it.

Yours，

Li Hua

寫作的要求是介紹一個地點，這與同學們的日常生活緊密相連，所以能讓同學們“學以致用”。另一方面，題目只是給了粗略的介紹，同學們不能僅僅簡單地翻譯那幾句話，這樣字數達不到要求，行文也不流暢。概括起來，本文的寫作要點有：簡要敘述前門大街的歷史、長度、位置以及商鋪；陳述到前門大街的交通方式；點出前門大街的特色。

習作1

Dear Sarah，

Thank you for your letter asking about the rebuilt Qianmen Street. Here is something about it.

Qianmen Street has over 600 years history①. This is a-800-metre street and has over 300 shops. Qianmen Street lies to the south of Tiananmen. Nearby have public bus about 17，69，59 routes and No.2 Subway.

And else， Qianmen Street is a pedestrian street， there are trolley car can ride you to hang out and there are many teahouses and theatres can offer you rest place or other interesting②.

I believe you will like Qianmen Street， a wonderful place！

Yours，

Li Hua

點評 這篇習作有很多句子可以加以改進：

如：①Qianmen Street has over 600 years history為中式英語，可改寫為：Qianmen Street has a long history of over 600 years.這樣的句子才是典型地道的英語。

再如：②And else， Qianmen Street is a pedestrian street， there are trolley car can ride you to hang out and there are many teahouses and theatres can offer you rest place or other interesting。此句不僅句子結構不對，而且在詞匯的用法上還有錯誤：there be句型中除了be動詞外，還使用了謂語can ride和can offer，這是個明顯的錯誤。并且，ride的用法也是錯誤的，應該是ride sth.而不是ride sb.。改進后的句子是：Whats more， Qianmen Street is a pedestrian street， where you can take trolley cars to hang around. And many theatres and teahouses of old traditional Beijing characteristic can bring you a lot of fun.

除此之外，還有一些錯誤：800米街道應該是an 800-metre street；Nearby have public bus about 17，69，59 routes and No.2 Subway，此句完全錯誤，應該是Nearby are buses No.17，69，59 and the No.2 subway.

總觀全文，這篇文章不算是一篇好的習作。

習作2

Dear Sarah，

Thank you for your letter asking about the rebuilt Qianmen Street. Here is something about it.

Its a famous street of over 600 years old①. The 800-metre street is located to the north of Tiananmen Square②. And along the street， there are more than 300 shops. In addition， the transportation there is really convenient. You can take the No.17， 69 and 59 buses to Qianmen Street. There is also a station where the No.2 subway will stop.

By the way， to your interest， there are also many places and things with old Beijing characteristics， such as the trolley cars， teahouses and theatres. Of course， you can buy some souvenirs when you hang about at the pedestrian street. Im sure that youll like this place. At last， hope you have a good time.

Yours， Li Hua

點評 這篇習作是一篇佳作，有很多優美的句子和亮點?！?br>