【試題呈現(xiàn)】
請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下歌詞,以“Hero”為主題寫一篇英語短文。
Hero
There’s a hero...
If you reach into your soul
And the sorrow that you know
Will melt away
And then a hero comes along
With the strength to carry on
And you cast your fears inside
And you know you can survive
So when you feel like hope is gone
Look inside you and be strong
And you will finally see the truth
That a hero lies in you
注意:①無須寫標(biāo)題;
②除詩歌外,文體不限;
③內(nèi)容必須結(jié)合你生活中的一個(gè)事例;
④詞數(shù)為120左右,如引用提示語,則不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
【審題謀篇】
這是美國歌手Maria Carey演唱的一首充滿力量和鼓舞精神的抒情歌曲的一部分。中文歌詞如下:
有一位英雄
如果你深入自己的靈魂
你所經(jīng)歷的痛苦將隨之消散
會(huì)有一位英雄向你走來
帶著繼續(xù)奮斗的力量
你會(huì)把恐懼拋開
你知道自己能挺過來
當(dāng)你感到希望似乎破滅
審視自己,保持堅(jiān)強(qiáng)
最終你將明白
英雄氣魄就在你身上
通過分析歌詞大意,我們不難找到文章的主旨就在最后一句:英雄氣魄就在你身上。歌詞中所展現(xiàn)出來的不畏困難、保持堅(jiān)強(qiáng)、繼續(xù)奮斗的精神就是英雄氣魄。
這種文章通常采取引題、記敘、總結(jié)的三段式。把握了主旨后,就可以謀篇布局了。第一段提出在日常生活中難免遇到困難,不畏懼困難,保持堅(jiān)強(qiáng),迎難而上,繼續(xù)奮斗才是正確的人生態(tài)度。第二段舉自己生活中的一個(gè)相關(guān)事例。第三段寫透過這個(gè)事例,你所得到的啟示,再次點(diǎn)明主題,首尾呼應(yīng)。
習(xí)作一
As an old saying goes, where there is a will, there is a success. That is to say, when you feel like hope is gone, you should look inside yourself and be strong. At length, you will succeed with the help of the hero lying in you.
There was once a time when I was weak in my math. Having failed in searval times in a row, I almost broken down. Upset and anxious, I couldn’t concentrate on my study. It was my head teacher that helped me realize that with a strong will in my heart, I can survive everything. So I followed her advice and held on, and I got through it finally.
So from what I have experienced you can see, success belongs to who are possessed of a strong will. Only when you are strong can you see the hero inside you and walk to the success.
點(diǎn)評(píng) 這是一篇中檔習(xí)作,其優(yōu)點(diǎn)是:
1. 文章中心明確,條理清楚,邏輯性強(qiáng)。作者考試屢次失敗,深受打擊,無法靜下心學(xué)習(xí)。在班主任的鼓勵(lì)下意識(shí)到堅(jiān)持的重要性,最終獲得成功。
2. 運(yùn)用了一些好的短語。如at length(最終), in a row(連續(xù)地), break down(崩潰),hold on(堅(jiān)持),be possessed of(具有)。
3. 運(yùn)用了多樣化的高級(jí)句式。如As an old saying goes; 分詞作狀語Having failed...; 形容詞作狀語Upset and anxious;……