I want to be a doctor

My dream is to be a doctor. When I was a little child， I used to be sick. So my parents had to take me to see doctors. They were very friendly to me and cheered me up every time. With their help， I am very healthy now. Since then， I have hoped to become a good doctor. In order to achieve my dream， Im studying hard to get more knowledge. I hope to go to a college to learn more. If I learn more， Ill know how to make patients healthy. Ill give my love to the patients as much as possible and help them out of danger. My mother always tells me to become a useful man and help others in trouble.

I think to be a doctor is really great. I think my dream will come true one day.

簡評：王艷同學(xué)能夠結(jié)合自己的成長經(jīng)歷，清晰描述自己有這個(gè)夢想的原因，并且正在為之付諸行動。短文時(shí)態(tài)準(zhǔn)確，語言流暢，感情真摯。

（指導(dǎo)教師：李池紅）