2023年12月大學(xué)英語(yǔ)四、六級(jí)作文試題評(píng)析（一）

四級(jí)

Directions： Suppose the university newspaper is inviting submissions from the students for its coming edition on a campus event that has impressed them most. You are now to write an essay for submission. You will have 30 minutes to write the essay. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

這道大學(xué)英語(yǔ)四級(jí)作文試題假設(shè)大學(xué)校報(bào)邀請(qǐng)學(xué)生投稿，內(nèi)容是給他們留下最深印象的一次校園活動(dòng)。這道作文題目與2014年12月的大學(xué)英語(yǔ)四級(jí)作文試題（a campus activity that has benefited you most）異曲同工，都屬于記敘文?？忌恍鑿牡谝蝗朔Q(chēng)的視角敘述一下這次校園活動(dòng)即可。

本文可以寫(xiě)三段。第一段先指出自己一直積極參加校園活動(dòng)，然后指出給自己留下最深印象的校園活動(dòng)是上個(gè)月舉行的一次模擬面試，此為破題。

第二段詳細(xì)敘述這次校園活動(dòng)。我們可以先交代舉辦這次模擬面試的背景：面試是在找工作的過(guò)程中最令人生畏的部分，為了幫助大四學(xué)生為即將到來(lái)的校園招聘季做好準(zhǔn)備，學(xué)校組織了這次模擬面試。接著敘述這次面試的經(jīng)過(guò)和收獲：我為這次面試做了精心的準(zhǔn)備，提前十分鐘到達(dá)，坐在外面等候。輪到我時(shí)，我進(jìn)入面試室坐在面試官的面前，先介紹一下我自己，然后依次回答他們的問(wèn)題。在面試結(jié)束時(shí)，面試官點(diǎn)評(píng)了我的表現(xiàn)，并就我的衣著、舉止和肢體語(yǔ)言提出了一些建議。

第三段先指出這次模擬面試的意義：它不但改進(jìn)了我的面試技巧，而且還增加了我的自信心。最后希望這次模擬面試能夠幫助自己在求職面試中脫穎而出，并在競(jìng)爭(zhēng)激烈的人才市場(chǎng)上找到理想的工作。下面請(qǐng)看參考范文：

I have always been an active participant in campus activities. As far as I can remember， the campus event that has impressed me most is the mock job interview held last month.

As we know， the interview is the single most daunting part of a job search. To help us seniors get well prepared for the upcoming on-campus recruitment season， our university organized the simulated interview. I prepared carefully for the interview and arrived ten minutes earlier， sitting outside waiting. When it was my turn， I entered the interview room and sat down before the interviewers. After having introduced myself， I answered their questions in turn. At the end of the interview， the interviewers commented on my performance and gave me some useful pointers on my attire， manner and body language.

The mock interview has not only improved my interviewing skills but boosted my confidence as well. I hope the event will help me ace the interview and nail my dream job in the highly competitive job market. （168 words）

語(yǔ)言亮點(diǎn)借鑒：

1. As we know， the interview is the single most daunting part of a job search.眾所周知，在找工作的過(guò)程中面試是最令人生畏的部分。single唯一的，在這里起加強(qiáng)語(yǔ)氣的作用。daunting令人生畏的。

2. I prepared carefully for the interview and arrived ten minutes earlier， sitting outside waiting.我為這次面試做了精心的準(zhǔn)備，提前十分鐘到達(dá)，坐在外面等候。sitting outside是現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)做狀語(yǔ)，修飾arrived。waiting是現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語(yǔ)，修飾sitting。

3. At the end of the interview， the interviewers commented on my performance and gave me some useful pointers on my attire， manner and body language. 在面試結(jié)束的時(shí)候，面試官點(diǎn)評(píng)了我的表現(xiàn)，并就我的衣著、舉止和肢體語(yǔ)言提出了一些有用的建議。pointer建議，相當(dāng)于suggestion或tip。

4. I hope the event will help me ace the interview and nail my dream job in the highly competitive job market. 我希望這次校園活動(dòng)能夠幫助我順利通過(guò)面試，并在競(jìng)爭(zhēng)激烈的人才市場(chǎng)上找到理想的工作。 ace順利通過(guò)。nail贏得。

六級(jí)

Directions： For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay that begins with the sentence “With their valuable skills and experience， elderly people can continue to make significant contributions to society.” You can make comments， cite examples or use your personal experiences to develop your essay. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words （not including the sentence given）.

這道大學(xué)英語(yǔ)六級(jí)作文試題屬于闡釋觀點(diǎn)型。這種類(lèi)型的試題經(jīng)常給考生一個(gè)開(kāi)頭句，這個(gè)開(kāi)頭句同時(shí)又表達(dá)了這篇文章的觀點(diǎn)。題目要求考生論述這個(gè)觀點(diǎn)的正確性。這道題目的觀點(diǎn)是老年人能夠用他們的寶貴技能和經(jīng)驗(yàn)繼續(xù)為社會(huì)做重要貢獻(xiàn)。

本文可以寫(xiě)三段。第一段先提出論點(diǎn)——老年人能夠用他們的寶貴技能和經(jīng)驗(yàn)繼續(xù)為社會(huì)做重要貢獻(xiàn)。然后以媒體上的大量報(bào)道為證：老年人通過(guò)做義工、照顧家人和為年輕人提供指導(dǎo)等形式幫助社會(huì)。

第二段論述為什么老年人能夠用他們寶貴的技能和經(jīng)驗(yàn)繼續(xù)為社會(huì)做出重要貢獻(xiàn)。我們可以先指出老年人的技能和經(jīng)驗(yàn)在多方面讓社會(huì)受益，接著從三個(gè)方面展開(kāi)論述。首先，許多老年人在退休之后投入時(shí)間做社區(qū)服務(wù)，比如幫助維持交通秩序，或者在流浪者收容所分發(fā)食物。為了增加說(shuō)服力，我們還可以引用官方的統(tǒng)計(jì)數(shù)字為證：在中國(guó)，超過(guò)20%的志愿者年齡超過(guò)65歲。其次，許多老年人為家里的親人提供照顧，這對(duì)許多家庭具有重要意義。除此之外，老年人有一生的經(jīng)驗(yàn)，這讓他們成為最好的導(dǎo)師。他們能夠在年輕人應(yīng)對(duì)人生挑戰(zhàn)的時(shí)候?yàn)樗麄兲峁┲笇?dǎo)。

本文可以用建議法結(jié)尾。第三段先總結(jié)上文，指出老年人是社會(huì)的財(cái)富，他們的貢獻(xiàn)對(duì)社會(huì)的正常運(yùn)轉(zhuǎn)至關(guān)重要。最后，我們水到渠成地建議政府采取有效措施，支持老年人為社會(huì)做貢獻(xiàn)。下面請(qǐng)看參考范文：

With their valuable skills and experience， elderly people can continue to make significant contributions to society. Stories abound in the media about how seniors are helping society by doing voluntary work， being caregivers and providing guidance to the young.

Senior citizens have skills and experience that can benefit society in many ways. After retiring from full-time work， many seniors volunteer their time to do community service， such as assisting in keeping traffic order or serving up food at a homeless shelter. In fact， according to official statistics， 20% of volunteers in China are over the age of 65. Also， elderly people are often caregivers， providing care for their loved ones， which holds great significance for many families. On top of that， seniors have a lifetime of experience， making them the best mentors. They can offer guidance to younger generations as they navigate life’s challenges.

Senior adults are a valuable asset to society. Their contribution is crucial for our society to function properly. Therefore， it is advised that the authorities take effective measures to support seniors in making contributions to society. （180 words）

語(yǔ)言亮點(diǎn)借鑒：

1. Stories abound in the media about how seniors are helping society by doing voluntary work， being caregivers and providing guidance to the young. 媒體上有許多關(guān)于老年人幫助社會(huì)的報(bào)道，他們做義工，照顧別人以及為年輕人提供指導(dǎo)。story新聞報(bào)道。abound大量存在，有許多。

2. On top of that， seniors have a lifetime of experience， making them the best mentors. 除此之外，老年人有一生的經(jīng)驗(yàn)，這讓他們成為最好的導(dǎo)師。making them the best mentors是一個(gè)現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)做狀語(yǔ)，表示結(jié)果。

3. They can offer guidance to younger generations as they navigate life’s challenges. 他們能夠在年輕人應(yīng)對(duì)人生挑戰(zhàn)時(shí)為他們提供指導(dǎo)。navigate成功應(yīng)付。

4. Therefore， it is advised that the authorities take effective measures to support seniors in making contributions to society. 因此，建議政府采取有效措施，支持老年人為社會(huì)做貢獻(xiàn)。the authorities政府，官方。support sb in doing sth支持某人做某事。

* 上海外國(guó)語(yǔ)大學(xué)國(guó)際新聞碩士，講師，專(zhuān)注大學(xué)英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作教學(xué)十余年。