合理運用銜接，建構連貫續(xù)文

廣東 王 思

【問題導讀】

讀后續(xù)寫要求考生在語言輸出的過程中做到“模仿語言，創(chuàng)造內容”，利用前文提供的語境，伴隨語篇情境，在確保內容合乎邏輯的前提下續(xù)寫下文。一篇好的續(xù)寫文章，不僅需要豐富的內容、巧妙的構思和形象的表達，還需要把這些內容聯系起來的語篇銜接手段。銜接是一種能使上下文之間取得連接與過渡的寫作技法，能使文章保持意義的連貫、文句的流暢和行文的變化。

【名師導學】

讀后續(xù)寫的評分標準主要涵蓋內容、語言表達和篇章結構三方面，其中篇章結構主要包括上下文的銜接和全文的連貫性。《普通高中英語課程標準（2017 年版2020年修訂）》要求學生能“根據交流的需要選擇恰當的語篇類型、設計合理的語篇結構、規(guī)劃語篇的組成部分、保持語篇的銜接性和連貫性”。銜接是將篇章中的句子連接成一個整體，從而創(chuàng)造連貫的重要手段。讀后續(xù)寫中的銜接主要通過語法和詞匯手段來實現，具體為照應、替代、省略、連接詞和詞匯銜接。

1.照應指用代詞等語法手段來表示語義關系，即在語篇中某個名詞或概念第二次或重復出現時應使用恰當的代詞或其他成分來替代。英語中的照應主要分為三類：人稱照應、指示照應、比較照應。

2.替代指用其他詞代替上文提及的內容，這樣可以避免重復，達到語言凝練、語句連貫的目的。替代包括名詞性替代（如one、ones、some 等）、動詞性替代（如do、does、did、doing、done等）和從句性替代（如so、not 等）。

3.省略的作用同替代相似。省略可以使上下語義聯系緊密，強調作者要表達的中心思想。省略大致分為三類：名詞性省略、動詞性省略、分句性省略。

4.連接詞指能把兩個或多個短句銜接起來的表達一定邏輯關系的詞。根據它們表示的關系可以分為四大類：增補（如and、also、too、furthermore 等）、轉折或對比（如but、yet、still、nevertheless、though、while、however 等）、原因或結果（如because、for、as、since等）和時間（如first、second、third等）。

5.詞匯銜接指在銜接紐帶的一端出現一個項目后，另一端被相同或相近意義的詞匯所占據。詞匯銜接手段是作者通過詞匯的選擇與復現得以實現的，選擇是前提，復現是手段。詞匯復現手段較易理解，指在語篇中詞與詞之間存在的原詞重復、同(近)義詞復現、反義詞復現、上下義詞復現、整體與部分關系和搭配關系。

【案例導引】

閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。

I met the Man of the Trees in summer ten years ago,when I was visiting Uncle Jita.

Those were difficult times.People were cutting down our forest, and there was often flooding.Sometimes our water supply was dirty.When our pump（泵）did have clean water, we had to wait in line for ages.When the pump wasn't working, we had to walk five kilometres to the closest stream.

But I was happy.I was going to see my favorite uncle.When the day finally arrived,Dad drove me to Uncle Jita's house and left.Once he saw me, Uncle Jita announced,“Tomorrow we're going to explore a magical place.Here is my camera,Amy.You can take photos of what you see.”

The following day, we woke up and left early on a boat.The trip was exciting.But when we got off, there was nothing in front of us.“I don't want to take pictures of this,”I complained.

Uncle laughed,“Start walking,Amy.I promise you'll be surprised.”After some time,I could see the outline of a forest in the distance.A little closer, there was a man waving to us.

“That's Kabir.The forest you see is his.He planted every single tree.”As we walked towards Kabir, Uncle explained that thirty years ago, the whole area was a wasteland.But one day, Kabir decided to change all that and started planting trees.Thanks to him, part of the wasteland is now a paradise.

Uncle introduced me to Kabir,who had gray hair and a determined face.“Jita told me you like animals.Are you ready to see some?”he asked.“Of course!”I replied.We continued walking and soon were under the trees.I turned my head and was amazed at the difference between the two places.All because of the efforts of one man.

Like Uncle said, Kabir's forest was magical.We saw deer, rhinos, and even tigers.During lunchtime, Kabir explained how, by planting trees, it was possible to stop the land from eroding（侵蝕）.

注意：續(xù)寫詞數應為150左右。

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Hearing this,I turned to Uncle,“I think we can plant trees too.”__________________

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In the years that followed,people in our village worked hard to carry out our plan.____

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一、故事梳理

本文講述的是艾米于十年前的夏天到吉塔叔叔家度假時遇到了“種樹之人”的故事。那時，艾米所在的村莊環(huán)境堪憂，樹木遭到砍伐，凈水資源嚴重不足，村民用水非常不便，但艾米卻處在馬上要見到自己最喜歡的叔叔的興奮之中。艾米到叔叔家的第二天，叔叔帶她參觀了卡比爾花費三十年時間親手種植的神奇森林。目睹卡比爾憑一人之力創(chuàng)造的“天堂”，聽他講述種樹如何防止水土流失，艾米馬上想到自己所在的村莊也可以通過種樹來改善環(huán)境。

點題指向Planting trees can help improve the environment.●Time:ten years ago in summer●Place:in our village●Characters:Uncle Jita,Kabir and I●Setting: People were cutting down our forest, which resulted in a lot of environmental problems.情節(jié)●Beginning:I went to visit Uncle Jita and he introduced me to Kabir.●Development:I witnessed how Kabir changed the wasteland into a paradise by planting trees.●Climax:I decided to change the situation of our village by planting trees.●Resolution:People in our village worked hard to carry out our plan.●Evaluation:Only when we live in harmony with nature can we have a brighter future.主題People should live in harmony with nature.

二、常用銜接方法的應用

（一）照應

1.人稱照應：通過人稱代詞（如I、you、he、she、they、him、her、them等）、所屬限定詞（如your、his、her、their等)和所屬代詞(如mine、his、hers、theirs等）來實現。

續(xù)寫第一段，當我們拿著照片去勸說村民種樹時，他們被森林的美所震驚?！癢hen Uncle and I went back to the village several days later and showed these wonderful pictures to my neighbours, they were stunned by the beauty of the forest.”。這里，我們用人稱代詞they來指代前面提到的my neighbours。

2.指示照應：用于指示照應的詞也可以分為名詞性指示詞this、that、these、those，定冠詞the，副詞性指示詞now、then這三類。

續(xù)寫第二段，通過全村人的共同努力，村里的環(huán)境發(fā)生了巨大的變化。多虧了村民種的樹，村里的水質變好了，水的供給也穩(wěn)定了?！癟hanks to the trees,the water has been purified and we finally have a clean and stable water supply.”。因trees 和water 都在前面提到過，所以這里用了定冠詞the。

3.比較照應：使用一些有比較意義的形容詞或副詞的比較級表達連貫的語義（如same、as、so、equal、such、similarly、differently、other、otherwise、likewise等）。

續(xù)寫第二段，經過村民們多年的努力，村里的環(huán)境發(fā)生了很大的改變。我們在續(xù)寫的時候可以利用比較、照應的手法來進行銜接，對比種樹前后村里的環(huán)境變化。“With our joint efforts, our village now looks different, which is surrounded by small thriving forests with blooming flowers, lively animals and crystal-clear streams running through.”。跟種樹前缺水、水臟的情況相反，現在村里有茂密的森林、盛開的鮮花、活潑的動物和清澈的河流，這些東西也正好照應了前文對卡比爾所種植的森林的描述。

（二）替代

根據續(xù)寫第二段的首句，我們可以反推出續(xù)寫第一段的結尾：我們成功說服了村民實施我們的種樹計劃。“We then persuaded the villagers to carry out our tree-planting plan, and they agreed to do so.”。這里，我們用so 來替代前面的carry out our treeplanting plan，避免了重復。

（三）省略

根據續(xù)寫第二段的首句，我們知道村民們開始種樹，這跟原文第二段描述的People were cutting down our forest 相 照 應?！癐nstead of cutting down the trees, we started to plant,which has eventually helped protect the soil and stopped the land from eroding.”?！拔覀儭辈辉倏硺洌拔覀儭遍_始種（樹）。這里為了避免重復，我們省略了plant 后面的the trees。

（四）連接詞

結合故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展，種樹給村里帶來了很多積極的影響。我們在續(xù)寫時需要對這些積極的影響進行詳細的描述，以突出種樹的重要性?！癐nstead of cutting down our forest, we started to plant trees, which has eventually helped protect the soil and stopped the land from eroding.Thanks to the trees,the water has also been purified and we finally have a clean and stable water supply.”。這里用了and 和also 來體現種樹所帶來的一系列的好處，凸顯了人與自然應該和平共處的主題。

（五）詞匯銜接

續(xù)寫第一段，為了說服村民們一起種樹，“我”決定拍照給村民看。“‘I've got a plan! I'll show them the photos of Kabir's magical forest!’...When Uncle and I went back to the village several days later and showed these wonderful pictures to my neighbours,they were stunned by the beauty of the forest.”。這里，photos 和pictures 屬于同義詞復現，這樣既避免了單詞的重復，又能使句子之間的聯系更緊密。同樣，續(xù)寫第二段，“Instead of cutting down our forest, we started to plant trees, which has eventually helped protect the soil and stopped the land from eroding.”。這個句子中的forest 和trees 也屬于此類銜接手法。

參考范文

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Hearing this,I turned to Uncle,“I think we can plant trees too.”Grabbing the camera in my hand, I added with excitement.“I've got a plan! I'll show the villagers the photos of Kabir's magical forest!”Seeing Uncle and Kabir's encouraging smile, I immediately set down to my work, busily pressing my shutter and capturing the amazing scenes in the forest.When Uncle and I went back to the village several days later and showed these wonderful pictures to my neighbours, they were stunned by the beauty of the forest.“It was the trees that turned the place into a paradise!”We then persuaded the villagers to carry out our tree-planting plan,and they agreed to do so.

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In the years that followed,people in our village worked hard to carry out our plan.Instead of cutting down our forest, we started to plant trees, which has eventually helped protect the soil and stopped the land from eroding.Thanks to the trees,the water has also been purified and we finally have a clean and stable water supply.With our joint efforts,our village now looks different, which is surrounded by small thriving forests with blooming flowers, lively animals and crystal-clear streams running through.Witnessing the gradual change of our village,we came to realize that only when we live in harmony with nature can we have a brighter future.

【模擬導練】

閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。

It was lunch hour.Escaping from my office,I fled down Main Street in pursuit of freedom from the routine of the day.An old bell clanged(叮當作響)against the door of a dusty used bookstore when I pushed it open.

Looking through the horizon of shelves and lots of magazines, my eyes suddenly met his and my heart began to race.They were the blazing(閃爍)orange eyes of an African lion on the cover of a magazine.I hadn't seen those eyes in the past thirty years, but their impact on me hadn't faded.As a kid,I used to dream about Africa,living with wild animals.

The opportunity of spending a“gap year”volunteering in Africa or joining the Youth Corps had long since passed.It was true that I couldn't go to Africa for several months, but maybe I could volunteer in Africa for a few weeks.

Over the next several weeks, I began to budget and save, determined to make it happen.The big day came.I arrived and met my boss, a young South African ranger (護林員)named Gary.He said,“Let me guess,you're here because you dreamed of Africa.”

“Yes!”I smiled.

“Well,it's time to wake up.This is a working game reserve.These are wild animals.”

“Okay.”

“You're going to have to get out of your comfort zone and take some risks.You need the courage of a lion.”

The next morning when we began our patrol (巡邏) in an open-air jeep, giant African elephants appeared in the morning mist.I was no longer dreaming in the pages of the magazine.I was living them.

Moments later, Gary parked the jeep and handed me a heavy shovel (鏟) and said,“Time to shovel dung (糞).”Elephant dung.Mountains of it! It will be used as fertilizer in the reserves'sustainable vegetable garden.

Within fifteen minutes, my back was aching, and my new work gloves were stretched out and they were so slippery with dung and sweat that they refused to stay on my hands.This wasn't my dream of Africa.注意：續(xù)寫詞數應為150左右。

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But at that moment I remembered Gary's words“step out of your comfort zone”.______

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【評價導思】

1.你在續(xù)寫的時候是否運用了銜接手段？使用了哪些銜接手段？

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2.除了前面提到的銜接手段，你還可以使用哪些銜接手段來使文章內部的連貫程度得到提升？

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3.在平時的寫作訓練中，你應該如何合理運用銜接手段，培養(yǎng)語篇連貫意識，提高續(xù)文的質量？

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