A Blog Post from My Brother

Today I showed two foreign friends visit淤our city—Shijiazhuang. We set offby car from the Friendship Hotel at 8 a.m. We first went to Peoples Park. We wereall struck by its beautiful flowers on show. Then we visited the City Museum. Wesaw a plenty of于valuable things and learnt more about the city from them. Afterthat， we went to Xibaipo by car. It is a beautiful place of interest in our city， andwe enjoyed the wonderful scenery of Taihang Mountain from there盂. We had adelicious lunch at Xibaipo Red Flag Restaurant and came back at 2：20 p.m.

All the foreign friends were pleased under my arrangements. We did have agood time today.

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張超

男，河北省衡水市阜城縣第四中學高級英語教師、縣骨干教師、市優秀英語教師，從事英語教育教學工作30 多年；多年來，在省級以上報刊發表文章數百篇，并有多篇文章獲獎；曾參與多本教輔資料的編寫工作；曾榮獲“中央教育科學研究所全國基礎教育科研先進個人”榮譽稱號；曾多次輔導多名學生在市、省和國家級英語競賽中獲獎。

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優點：

本文分享了一次石家莊之旅，按時間順序對旅游經過進行了細致的描述。

需要修改的地方：

①visit 改為around。show sb. around 意為“帶領某人參觀……”。

②a plenty of 去掉a。短語plenty of 意為“足夠的，大量，很多”。

③去掉介詞from。因為there 是副詞，其前面無需使用介詞。

評分：

按照中考英語作文滿分20 分的標準，本文修改前可得17 分。