增加書面表達“亮點”的方法

晁會霞　陳霄云　余潔妮

眾所周知，書面表達評分分為五檔，處于四、五檔的考生，英語水平不低，要想在考試中得高分，要增加語言的“亮點”。在保證準確的前提下，根據書面表達的內容、篇章結構和自己的實際水平，敢于和善于使用高級詞匯、語法結構。

依據多年的教學經驗，總結出了一些成功的英語書面表達中的增加文章“亮點”的方法，希望能給于想在考試中書面表達得高分的學生一些幫助，現歸納如下。

一.改變句子開頭或運用倒裝結構

①用狀語開頭

In the center of our school lies our library，which is between the garden and the teaching building.（高級）

Tired but happy，the girls rode bikes to the school.（高級）

Badly injured as he was，he managed to take down the cars number.（高級）

Only in this way（by using it often）can I improve my English.（高級）

Hardly had he come back when he knew the truth.（高級）

②以不定式短語開頭

He came to Beijing to visit his uncle.（一般）

To visit his uncle，he came to Beijing.（高級）

③以同位語開頭

一般句式：Shakespeare is a son and he is from a poor family.He had little education.He wrote many plays and poems.People all over the world like his plays and poems.（句式單一，啰嗦）

黃金句式：Shakespeare，a son from a poor family，a man of little education，wrote plays and poems that are read all over the world.

（以同位語開頭，用一個較復雜句式，表達層次清晰，句式多變）

二.運用分詞結構和獨立主格使句子簡潔，更有文采。好多考生在寫作時不敢或不知如何使用這個最大的“亮點”，其實很簡單，方法：一去，二看，三改。一去：去連詞;二看：看主語;三改：改分詞。如：Because I am an active young person，I like sports and outdoor activities.第一步，去掉連詞Because;第二步，看前后兩句話的主語，前后主語一致，去掉主語，改用分詞，若前后主語不一致，保留主語，改成獨立主格;第三步，改用分詞，am變成分詞being。

Being an active young person，I like sports and outdoor activities.

如下一般句型改為高級句型：

After everything was done，they sat in the yard and chatted with the elderly people.→Everything done，...

Because she realize her mother must be tired after a days work，the girl helps to remove the bag from her shoulder.→Realizing her mother must be tired after a days work，...

He was praised by his teacher in public，the naughty boy determined to study hard.→Praised by his teacher in public，...

三.巧用連接詞及承接短語

①利用連接詞so…that，not only…but also，too…to 等。

一般句式：He was diligent.He worked day and night.So he had many great inventions.→黃金句式：He was also so diligent that he worked day and night.And this explained why he had so many great inventions.

黃金句式：Dears friends，please actively take part in after-class activities，which will not only make your school life colorful，but also improve your learning.

② 使用恰當的承接短語，使文章過渡自然，流暢連貫，條理清晰。如：

For one thing，bicycles do not have any petrol and they are energy-saving.For another，bicycles are environmentally friendly because they wont give off waste gas.Whats more，riding bicycles is a good way for us to exercise and it is beneficial to our health.

At first，I did most of the duties myself while other students cared little about class activities.As a result，I was tired out and depressed.Then I turned to my teacher and he advised me to cooperate with others.Thus I began to recognize the strength of my classmates and have everyone do their part in class.

四.走出“高級詞匯、語法結構”誤區

誤區之一：“高級詞匯”就是生僻詞、長單詞或一些“大詞”。

如：I have found a flat，covering an area of 25 square meters with a bedroom，a bathroom，and a kitchen.（covering在此屬大詞小用）

修改：I have found a flat for you，25 square meters in size with a bedroom，a bathroom，and a kitchen.（本文恰當使用了高級結構同位語、介詞短語，使句子顯得簡練、清楚。）

誤區之二：過多使用所謂的“高級句子結構”

如學生習作：I strongly hope that this plan should be carried out continually not only because it has given us more space to develop our critical thinking and independent ability but also because we really feel much happier than ever before.（本文一個句子用詞39個，運用了一個賓語從句，兩個狀語從句。太冗長）

修改：I strongly hope that this plan should be carried out continually because it has allowed us more space to develop our critical thinking and independent ability.Whats more，we really feel much happier than ever before.

注意使用“高級詞匯、語法結構”一要簡潔、準確、得體，通俗易懂，二要在自己的能力范圍內，三要恰如其分，不是越多越好，要長短句式結合。

總之，英語作為一門語言學科，學生要想提高自己的閱讀水平和寫作水平，重在平時一點一滴的積累。掌握了提升文章“亮點”的方法后，還要在日常學習中多積累亮點詞匯，短語和高級句型，并且多加練習，多模仿特定的句型句式多練習句子翻譯，從而寫出準確、地道的語言，提升自身的語言表達能力。