MyVacation

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尹一書 女，湖南省邵陽市洞口縣醪田鎮中學教師。在教育教學中認真鉆研教材，大膽創新，取得了優良的成績。

My Vacation

The vacation is coming. I have a plan for my vacation. I’m going to Hainan with my family. I’m going to the beach. I’m going to go fishing in the sea. Ha！Ha！I really like it. I’m going to go swimming in the sea with my parents. We are going to visit places of interest. That sound① very funny！I’m going to play the beach volleyball② with my sister， too. I can play it very well. Oh， we are going to stay there a week③. So you see， it’s really a relaxing vacation. I can’t wait！

湖南省洞口縣醪田鎮中學193班 邵娟

1. 優點：

對于初中的學生來說，這是一篇不錯的假期計劃。學生還只學了用be going to…的結構來表示一般將來時，而小作者已經能能很好地運用了。全文內容完整，語句比較流暢，且上下文通順。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①sound 改為 sounds。句中that作主語，sound作謂語。That為第三人稱代詞作主語，謂語動詞要用第三人稱單數。

②play the beach volleyball 要去掉the。球類運動前不加冠詞the。

③a week 改為for a week。用介詞“for+時間”表示持續的時間段。

3. 評分：

按中考英語作文滿分15分的評分標準，本文修改前可得12分。