你將來打算做什么

李　惠

同學們經常會被問及將來打算干什么。那現在大家就都來談談自己的理想吧！以理想為題寫一篇作文。要求：60~80詞左右。

I Want to be a Policewoman

I want to bepolicewoman. Because I like to helpwithpeople. I like dangerous work. I think I will be able to catch the thief. Because I can run very fast. This is a very interestingthings. Maybe I will become a teacher. Icanwork with children. I love children, so Ill be happy. But I think Icantdo dangerous things. So I want to bepolicewoman.

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I Want to be a Policewoman

I want to a policewoman. Because Id like to help people in trouble. I like dangerous work. I think I will be able to catch the thief. Because I can run very fast. This is a very nervous and interesting job. Maybe I will become a teacher. I will work with children together. I love children, so Ill be happy. But I wont do such dangerous work! So I really want tobea policewoman!