作文大比拼

原文：

My Clothes

Come to my home. Look1 my clothes. This is a yellow T-shirt. Its 5 dollars. The sweater is 10 dollars. I very like it2. This3 shoes are black. They are 20 dollars. And this bag is very cheap. Its threeteen4 dollars. These are my clothes. Oh, I forget my hat. It is a red hat5.

分析：

本篇介紹了自己衣柜里的服飾。敘述簡潔、有條理，值得學習，但其中也有幾處需要注意：

1. Look 是不及物動詞，所謂不及物動詞也就是不能直接跟賓語。如果要跟賓語，應在其后加上介詞at。

2. “我非常喜歡它”正確的語序為I like it very much。

3.shoes 為復數，所以不能用this, 表示這雙鞋應說成this pair of shoes。

4. 數字13 的表達需要特殊記憶，thirteen。

5. “它是一個紅色的帽子。”冠詞a用來修飾名詞hat。為了避免重復，在此應用one 代替hat。

改正：

My Clothes

Come to my home. Look at my clothes. This is a yellow T-shirt. Its 5 dollars. The sweater is 10 dollars. I like it very much. This pair of shoes are black. They are 20 dollars. And this bag is very cheap. Its thirteen dollars. These are my clothes. Oh, I forget my hat. It is a red one.